M.O.: if it sounds right, it must be (or, there’s always room for grace)

These rules baffle me,

makes grammar seem so grammar-

ly, while habitat

 

poetic should not

be stoic-ly honed, watch me

analysing some

 

prosetry there with

crossed toes, and spaces filling

not where they should be.

 

I’d rather splash ’round

before diving into this

language embrace of,

 

of finest syntax

enveloping me, bathing

astonish-ed-ly,

 

your words of divine

crafting, filing pieces of

your soul. Absorbing,

 

inspired, what I am

trying to say, is that my

heart has grateful eyes.

 

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      And you are too kind! ❤
      Whenever anyone starts talking about words and whatnot that should not be split, and throw grammar technicalities around in front of me, all I am hearing are atoms splitting 🙂
      I have a story about this but I will email it

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              and cream!
              Which reminds me, a good friend introduced me to putting cream on ice cream, it does sound redundant, but it is seriously delicious. And I mean real cream, not from a can or anything like that.

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                    1. When you get the black screen, click on top right download arrow, and then open box at bottom… maybe….

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                    2. You’re right, it told me my browser wouldn’t play it, but it downloaded fine.
                      What a great song! I have never heard that. Was this a favourite for you and your wife? Who’s singing?

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                    3. Great, written by friend Terry Fielding a few months ago, he had an Australian #1 hit back in 1972 !! came The Whale. see if I can find for you.

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    Nice thought provoking poetry Vanessa. I like the twists and turns, rather like trying to understand rules of grammar etc. I like it when writers / poets take the rules and shake them a bit. Echoes of e e cummings in this 🙂

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      Hi, thank you! I like experimenting with word order etc, the impact can be so different with something so simple, I think the whole thing is interesting in light of the fact that the “rules” are so different between languages as well.
      And my eyes literally glaze over when it gets technical lol.

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        I agree Vanessa. The good thing with computers is you can cut and paste bits of poems and end up with a piece of poetry you never intended.

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        I been floating around Vanessa, so much going on in my life and the busy days help carry me forward. Blogging has suffered tremendously, I am hoping to catch up one of these days. How have you been sweet lady?

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          Well I hope you are not being too overwhelmed Gina? But if it is helping?
          I am doing okay, thanks. Not great for a time, my back issues were getting the better of me, but things have been better lately, so I am obviously really pleased about that. Also, autumn is my favourite time of year, so that helps a lot!

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            oh back problems can be so tedious i hope you are getting it looked at and doing some strengthening exercises? good to hear that you are on the mend Vanessa.

            i been busy which is always good, with work and the managing the kids, also went on a trip, se

            oh Autumn is my favourite time too next to winter and snow, i experienced some very dry autumns in Auckland and love the last roses of the season, they have a certain fragility that’s so endearing.

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