“Can we just lie here for a moment? She knows what to do and it’s so much easier to make out the words if you press your ear against the stone.”
He hated this place. But she promised it would be the last time. And it had started to snow. It would hopefully slow the others down.
They needed to leave. He was too scared to look at his watch and now he was struck by how beautiful she looked in this light.
That pink light, reflecting from the tears frozen on her face.
He pulled her gently up from her mother’s grave.
Lyrics:
mother they are coming again
they come to shoot what we already lost
mother they are coming again
our silver covered by their rust
father they are coming again
they come to jail the things that i have seen
father they are coming again
burning minds to keep the ruin clean
no one is around
„little girl there’s safer ground
follow the sea and you will find that place
little girl there’s safer ground
come take your years and put them in their hands“
wow
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Wowsers AP. I’m honoured to get a wow from you 😀
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Haha. You are very good!
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Thank you! ❤
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Beautifully written
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Lois! Hi! Thank you so much. That means a lot!
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My pleasure!
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in every story the female lead adds the colour and adventure – love this one
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does she? it must be sub conscious… hehe
Thank you for your always encouraging words!
This song really intrigued and inspired me.
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I find this one very powerful, as well. Although my opinion differs a little from Gina’s, the main character for me in this story is the compassion between the man and the woman. You really have a talent for these short pieces, V. This one really tells a powerful story of the relationship between the man and woman, the relationship between the woman and her mother… and does so with just a few words to convey a span of time that is longer than just a moment. Great piece.
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Thank you S. I so appreciate how you “get” my work! And I am so happy that you like it!
Such a big story developed in my mind when I heard this song…I am glad if that is conveyed somewhat.
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Well, something conveyed, I dont know if it was what your head but it made sense in mine!
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Enjoyed this Vanessa. My interpretation features a range of dead people who are still animate (the way I like them) and a mob of townsfolk on their way. I can’t help it. 🙂
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Hi Steve! I am so glad you enjoyed it, that means a lot to me! You are such an awesome story teller.
And I am glad too hahaha, I mean, a pretty huge story formed in my head about escape. So however that works for you! 😉
And this song intrigues me so much…I read a short interview with the musician, they tried to capture the little girl’s story of the long journey of leaving a really bad past, (and then finally some hope at the end), just in the musical structure without even the words and I think they did an awesome job of it.
And I am always thinking about the poor people escaping war as well. The song lyrics are wonderful, “they come to jail what I have seen, burning minds to keep the ruins clean…”
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Oh and I definitely had a surreal/fantasy story in my head as well…er…all of the above…maybe more…
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It came across. ⭐ I enjoy pieces where you’re wondering Is this real or metaphorical? Is this alluding to something else? and so on.
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That’s interesting Steve, considering your work is nothing like that 😀
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lol
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Wow. That’s a really powerful piece of writing.
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Hi. Thank you! I really appreciate that!
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Your story was powerfully touching for me, on a day of visiting my parents grave sites, and my wife’s also,,,, coincidence or karma,,, I’m not sure…. And I loved the song, the lyrics are superb.
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I am so humbled to hear that!
(I am amazed at the “coincidences” on WP all the time. And the loving way of Providence, imho :))
Yes, I love the song too, everything about it. I’m so glad you like it. Thank you for saying. I read an interview with the writers and the journey of the girl they wanted to capture in the music. I think they did an amazing job.
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The interview must have been very interesting, the lyrics are amazing.
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It was only a short snippet in an article I found…but I loved how they really wanted the music to tell the story before they even worked on the amazing lyrics. A true work of art. I’m so glad you listened to it 🙂
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Short but strong and powerful post.
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Thank you! I enjoy writing short pieces.
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You are brilliant at it.
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I enjoyed this piece! Unfortunately, I can’t hear the audio.
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Thank you!
I’m not sure what is going on with that, it won’t play for me on all my devices either, the PC and phone are fine, but my tablet, not.
I don’t think you are missing much, quite frankly 🙂 I am not really a fan of my own audio.
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I’m sure it sounds great. Wish I could hear it.
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thank you. hmmm I need to do some investigating
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That last line just punches. I know what it is like to be pulled from a mother’s grave and this really hits home. Excellent!
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Do you? I’m sorry. I haven’t had that experience yet. Not looking forward to it.
And thank you so much!
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Yes, unfortunately my mother died before her 65th birthday, many years ago. But, it is a part of life and most of us will, at some point, lose a parent or both. You are welcome!
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Oh that is so young!
My mother has reached 80, neither of us can believe it -how quickly time goes.
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It is, too young. Enjoy the time you have with your mom. They are precious moments that will stay with you forever.
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Indeed!!
We were with someone today who’s dying. Life is precious.
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It is. I am attending a memorial this afternoon for a cousin who passed a year ago – he was 47. We never know!
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Blessings on your afternoon!
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Thank you! Have a beautiful day!
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It’s evening here, but thank you 😊
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🙂 Then have a beautiful evening and remainder of the day! You are welcome!
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Vanessa, a great revisit and again, the ending of the story revealing the power of the moment and of compassion between the two. Happy to read it again, as if it were new and with a wonderful song.
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Thank you Steve!
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🤓👍🙏
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I heard your voice! Wonderful… you really ARE Australian!!
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haha thank you! Now you know for sure. 😁I almost didn’t post them
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Glad you did! I posted my voice today… kinda freaked out a little by it!
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Did you?? I must find it! It is freaky, isn’t it? But i think it just makes this cyber stuff more real, which I like.
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Agree on all counts. It is my return to The Song of the Week, the song Son by The National.
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Related thoughts to the literalness of lying on someone’s grave, felt like I was with him. It’s been a long time
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Awww are you okay, Love?
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Yep 🙂
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😊🍰
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oh I heard her (your!) voice and I liked it!! i see more and more posting their voices reading poetry etc, so tempted too but I hate my voice! it was really special to hear you Vanessa
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Thank you so much!
It is really hard to do, I don’t really like the way my voice sounds, and I am not convinced I should do readings. But I like that it makes everyone seem more real. I totally encourage you to do it, I am sure you are being too hard on yourself 🙂
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it sounds perfect, and love the accent Vanessa, you speak clearly and with much inflection. No not hard on myself just a realist. I still cant get over how my voice affects people when I relay instructions to patients, they have a good laugh though and ask which child was speaking over the intercomm! anyway I would continue to listen to your reading, its very melodic and I feel a deeper connection to the story when you do.
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haha really Gina? Your intercom comment made me smile. It sounds to me like you have a sweet voice!
And thank you for your specific and kind comments, I really appreciate the feedback.
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