the reckoning and the reasoning and the ripening and then the sneezing
the forces unmeasured in the revolt and then the squeezing
of the music into lifelines that drip with hoped unheeding
and she’s covering her ears so no one sees the internal bleeding
with the streams of the thoughts she cannot appropriate
and the dreams and the oughts that she cannot estimate
within her fevered running soul that’s forgotten where it’s been
the itching of the scratch is not at all what they said it’d seem
and she holds the words in front of her in hands that shake with dread
they’re in her own heart language but unrecognized instead
in their current configuration that has come from somewhere other
and if only she could sleep now…
Wow. This is really powerful
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Hi! Thank you. It was a bit of a surprise last night actually.
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I bet
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Amazing work!
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Wow. Thank you, that’s kind
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You’re welcome. 🙂
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🙂
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my sweet Vanessa, this is outstanding! my heart aches with every line but I know there is freedom in writing it all out
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Hi Gina.
Thank you so much!
I was listening to music as I often do before bed, and stumbled on this piece. It’s so cinematic, within a couple of minutes this had all come out.
I really enjoy writing fiction, but there were things blended in here that evidently needed to come out,a stream of consciousness thing I haven’t done in ages!
Thank you for your always thoughtful words ❤️
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sorry i am so late in replying, be terribly busy with stuff! and i read your email and wanted to reply you properly too. you do fiction so well, it’s rare that you post it here but the times you have it’s been one of the best writing from you. music does not inspire me as much as images do so I am always amazed at how you work the music into your poetry, for that matter how your heart processes it. my pleasure always to read your words Vanessa!
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Gina! Please don’t apologise…You know I am not around every day either. It’s perfectly fine.
And thank you so much for your feedback! I do enjoy writing it. There’s just been so much taking my emotional energy, I know it’s depleted my writing. It was really starting to get me down. So thank you from my whole heart!
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like you i wish i could spend more time on reading blogs too, so much of talent out there, yours included in my usual list.
the toll on emotional energy can drain us just as much or even more than physical stress and you need an outlet for that, writing is one way for sure, but yes sometimes it can paralyze us too. i know that too well. however it is you are do come back strong when you do write.
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Yes you do, dear Gina. 😔
Thank you. 💕
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A truly heartfelt poem, and i totally immersed myself in these two fascinating lines.
“within her fevered running soul that’s forgotten where it’s been
the itching of the scratch is not at all what they said it’d seem”
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Hi Ivor, thank you so much. I feel honoured that you spent time in it.
This piece of music created a world in my mind that combined a number of things that have been brewing for a little while, I think.
How are you, and your computer these days?!
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Hi Vanessa, I’m using a temporary little computer my brother set up me, I’m coping ok, a pic attached(I hope)
https://1drv.ms/u/s!Asumt4cZ9A65g_RflR60LtPd6pCDXQ
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Well done Ivor’s brother! 😊
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I found the rhythm quite compelling when I began reading, overpowering the content. Then focusing on the theme and … oh yes! So good 😊
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Diana! Hi!
Your comment is so interesting…that is how I felt…the music of it quite overwhelmed me as I started writing it, but I think it matched the urgency of the compulsion I felt to just get it out. I got so caught up in this world in my mind, but it was a therapeutic moment I needed more than I realised.
Thanks so much!
Hope you’re well and still having lovely summer days?
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Hey V!! *runs up and gives you a helluva hug*
I love the description of how you composed this. It shows how “in the zone” you were; It is almost like a trance sometimes isn’t it?
Summer is fabulous … obsessed with the outdoors and two wheel adventures (Moto and bicycle) …. trails and fresh berries and mountain air!! Ahhh!!
Are you well sweetheart?
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hahaha I love that. Thank you. Hug totally reciprocated!
Yes, it’s interesting isn’t it? It’s like my mind sometimes stores away these nuts like a squirrel, haha and then when the time is finally right, they get cracked, but all at once I guess.
Your summer does sound fabulous! I’m so happy to hear it!!
And I am doing okay, thank you! We’ve had lots of super emotional things going on lately, but all things considered, we’re doing okay, and I am grateful for that. Putting other serious stuff out of our minds till his next scan in Nov, and like you said, trusting that there will be no changes etc, just a peace of mind protocol hopefully.
Thanks for your comments ❤
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I’m mesmerized by this piece!
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Wow, I’m so honoured! 🌸
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Nop,you are so good with words😉😍!
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Thank you! ❤️
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Powerful and mesmerising.
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Thank you so much!
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