it was Friday. she made a list for him. lists are not her thing

wednesday – part one

he called her thursday – part two

one sweet potato and
one eggplant, listed after the fact
of purchase
one notepad
one pencil
one cup of Russian Caravan tea
one wind chime, dulcet tenor
one sugar craving
one lizard
is that a sack of potatoes?
stop thinking about chocolate
one ‘learning French’ app not accessible
one ladder, with a hammer, on top
one vignette of a tree behind a tree behind a tree
one speech balloon wafting from a person passing
intercepted by thought balloon puffed up by farce-ing
birds
rustling
distant echoes of congratulatory applause, not imaginary
one pale butterfly, resolutely flying, accidentally beautifying

one letter discovered on the next page, never sent, of something half forgotten
one match lit

 

~

Quite a while ago, this amazing writer: Fitfulfearfulphantasmal
did an awesome post, which was a story in list form.  She challenged me to try it and it fell by the wayside for many reasons. But I just remembered it, so inspired by the idea, I finally got around to this feeble attempt, as part of a longer story.

33 Comments

  1. so well written V! says so much between the lines and also explicit in the items you bring to the list, it is quite deliberate that those things come to mind. your last line with the half written letter really resonated with me on so many levels. I have missed your writing so much.

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    1. Gina, I appreciate the way you read between the lines, thank you for your kind comment!
      I was outside writing this, and some of these things were in my field of vision, and it all started falling in place. Each thing having layers of meaning that just seemed to fit with the story developing in my mind. It’s so fun when it works out like that!

      It means so much it resonated, thank you dear Gina!

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      1. it is funny how we are led to see , hear or even read those things which will generate a collective effect on our hearts and minds. However I do sense that you have more of this understanding than the rest of us. It makes me want to slow down and just sink into your words.

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    1. I don’t know how I missed this Steve! Thank you!

      I did enjoy this one, and as I went I started thinking this could be a huge story. I’m also really craving tea now.
      I wouldn’t know Steve, I’ll take your word for it lol 😆

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      1. My pleasure, Vanessa. I no longer look back to discover what I’ve missed. I feel better that way.

        I love your new avatar BTW. Please don’t embarrass me by telling me you changed it long ago. Oh alright, you can if you want.

        I have been unable to establish the connection between tea, matches and eggplant, but I am not overly concerned.

        With the longer story, I say go for it. Maybe in some ways, longer pieces are a sequence or list of points that are expanded.

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        1. That seems like a very simple, logical and do-able way to feel better.
          And gosh, Steve, thanks so much! How kind! And no, I only changed it a few days ago.

          I appreciate the effort you have gone to to establish a connection there, definitely made me smile
          ….the simple answer is that the beginning is about the fact that she isn’t good with lists…a couple of random objects for their own inside joke.
          I am still pondering if there is something more to the tea…and I know you have some kind of thing for wanting the match to be with the egg plant, but I am not as creative as you…lol.

          Yes, I agree with your last point. No pun in any way intended 🙂

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          1. No reasoning or creativity involved, I simply pick something at the start and something at the finish of your list and added the tea because you mentioned it. You also mentioned “random” but I wonder whether anything at all we write is actually random.

            And “creativity” from either of us (apart from the fact that you obviously are 🙂), I have no idea, because I’m not at all sure what it really is.

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