parting ways

“I thought it only fair to warn you, but the baby will come at dark. And you know how they like to prey.”

She shuddered as the courage in her spine parted ways, some into the atmosphere, the rest slipping into the earth. She knew he didn’t mean pray.

Overwhelmed with gratitude and relief that he had come, the baby moved inside her.

~*~

When I woke this morning these words were in my head! What on earth had I been dreaming? I hadn’t thought about writing  short stories, but maybe I’ve changed my mind…

19 comments

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    Hi Gina! Thank you. I appreciate that, as I really love the way you write!
    Maybe I will. But I am a little intrigued to maybe only write short snippets like this one.

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      and thats great! this is beautiful flash fiction! leaving a lot to the imagined. oh you write amazingly good words Vanessa. haha mine are just little lines. this was very strong. I liked it very much.

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          and you are always sweet to me. you should explore this more. as I have said before I start writing with a feeling. no thoughts. no words. just a feeling. I think I said too often it has become others mantra now! but do that. the words will flow. and you have the gift of deep contemplation. your pen will create the words.

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    OOh I like this!!! Very evocative, lots of imagery with little text. Really enjoying these micro fictions Vanessa! “The courage from her spine separated” holy crap, I LOVE that. It gave me a chill!

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      Hi! Thank you! I am so glad you like it. It’s my favourite so far. I am kind of addicted to writing these actually. I’m scared it’s going to deteriorate into pulp fiction haha, but it’s so fun!

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        If you’re happy and enjoying it, who gives a crap what it’s called? I love it for sure 😊😊 the way you distill the emotions in such short phrases is nothing short of magnificent!! If it ends up with travolta dancing, hey it happens 🤣🤣

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